Essay 1-01b: Who am I

Hello, My name is Sayaka Saruwatari. I live in kumamoto, Japan. I am very happy that I will be visiting you for a home stay starting in this summer. I would like to thank you very much for agreeing to be my hosts.
Let me introduce myself. First, We are family of 6 , my parents, my older sister, my younger brother, my younger sister and me. My father works in a factory. My mother is a house wife. My older sister is a clerk. My younger brother is in the third year of high school. My younger sister is a junior high school student. I’m 19 years old and go to KGU. So We are large family.
Next, My hometown is Nankan. It is famous for thin wheat noodles and which is Age. It is called “Nankan Soumen” and “Nankan Age”. The Age is used to make miso soup for the Japan style dish. There is a sushiroll with it. It’s very delicious. What is the famous food of your country? Please tell me about it.
There is a hotel called “Sekia Hills “. A lot of guest from foreign countries visit the hotel, for example, Chinese, Korean and others. In addition Nankan has a frigid climate.
My hobby is cooking. My best dish is rice porridge. I make original rice porridge with a lot of vegetables. I also like English. So I’m very excited to learn English and culture while I stay. I hope I can talk with you in English.
Finally, I have never been to America before, so I am looking forward to going this time and seeing you then.

revisions
I like my family. Because my family relaxes me.
I know Nagasu. But I haven't been there before now. So, I want to go Nagasu next time.
Nankan is near by Fukuoka. And Nankan is surrounded by mountain. Please come to my hometown, if you have a chance.
It is very easy to make original porridge.Let's show you how to make it this time.
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